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.... mashed them together and added a jalapeno ....

A great first start! At first when I scanned it over I wasn't even going to bother reading, I thought 'Ah, its just like everything else...' But then I looked ...

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Wow there are so many. If you like chocolate chip there is a great one on the back of the Toll House Nestle chocolate chip bag. I know you wouldn't ...

Snoink- Thanks for your suggestions! "And we are not graced by her crown

Ayra-Oh! Why didn't I think of 'the'?" Thank you! Gothgirl- Thanks for commenting. And as Ayra said, i do use 'and' as a style. I sometimes use it too much ...

Great job. Its simple but gets what you want to say across in a way that everyone can relate to it. I know that this isn't very helpful but I ...

One thing i noticed myself really liking about this is the rhyming. Not real complex, but not forced either. As I skimmed other comments I realized that lots of people ...

Hmmmmm....*blinks* I'm confused. Why do you hate this person if: "I realize everything you do is for me." and: "But it was for me." and: "I want to tell you ...

if you've never written poetry before this is really good. I find though, that there are some parts that I don't understand. It is probably just me, but you might ...

Really good. I love the format and the way it reads. One thing I found a little odd was how some lines have the first letter capitalized and some don't. ...

Did you say you were having a problem with emoticons? I am. Whenever I click on one it doesn't show up. To actually get it on my page I have ...

Thanks for commenting! I know what you mean about the rhymes and sounding like song lyrics, but its a sonnet, which has a specific format, so I can't really change ...

This would work better with a different format. As Kepe said above, it doesn't really sound poetic. But it is well done and beautiful. Wherever you have a period, try ...